Entered on 23 Nov.

When does Sebastian actually collapse?

• Right after the injured are taken to the hospital
  • Why wouldn’t they take him to the hospital, too, especially if Diane thinks it’s a heart attack?
• In the evening, when people start debating whether to stay or press on
  • Same as above, there’s no way in hell Diane wouldn’t take him to an available and fully functioning hospital.
• In the night, during shared dreams
  • Can’t collapse when you’re already lying down.
  • Could collapse in Diane’s dream, and resist waking up in the morning.
• In the morning, during debate
  • Would influence the decision, probably.
• In the morning, during the Homeland excommunicating them
  • Would steal the spotlight, make the scene feel crowded.
• In the morning, after they leave the Homeland
  • People would wonder if it was leaving the Homeland that sapped the last of his strength.
• When the group enters Dragon City
  • Will express the immediacy of the situation.
  • Possibly too similar to the old version of events.
• Decision
  • Have him get violently ill in the Homeland, the morning before everyone leaves. He will write it off as bad food, but will have a mild fever as well.
  • Fever will get worse as they progress to Detroit, and he will collapse when the Caravan is being welcomed to the city by Jason.