Rewriting the Remembrance, from 7 March

In my old notes, from the beginning of the rewrite, I ask the question, “Why in the world would he leave his wife for a second time?” I now have to ask myself why Sebastian would leave his wife the first time, especially now that he’s fighting what he’s becoming rather than embracing it.

Nikki says that Diane should see her husband struggling not to change, fighting to hold it in, even under the onslaught of worship from the city’s citizens. She will see that it is causing him great pain, and will be reminded of Herod’s earlier statement that fighting the change would be deadly. She should run out to him, insist that he let go, because she’d rather have him changed than not have him at all. Nikki suggests he can tell her, after he changes, “I must fly. I will return.”

I think that this would allow the chapter to end with Diane sobbing in Jason’s arms, rather than verbally and physically assaulting him.