This small part of Adam’s name is taking me forever to edit. I’m adding a few pages to it, just about doubling its length, because it needs more. ( Thanks ) I’ve got a decent start on it, but I feel stuck. Should I bring the girl in early, or should they run into each other on the dance floor? Should there be more foreshadowing about the story that Adam is getting involved in? Or should there just be more about how he feels apart from everything?

This is the first encounter that has Adam really and truly just observing someone else’s story. He’s slipped into another fictional world, one in which a girl gets initiated into a sisterhood of witches. Adam will only witness a very small slice of the story, but it will be enough to send him on his way. Since Adam’s telling the story, putting more emphasis on his separation from the world around him makes the story uninteresting… why should the reader care? And Adam certainly loses himself in this girl as he tries to escape into the drunk game again… maybe he shouldn’t be so okay with leaving at the end.

I might just need to fill the space with words and see what comes out. :)