[Excerpt] Two Vampires

I’ve finished answering all of the motivational questions but two. They’re pretty damn pivotal, but I think the story needs to simmer more in my head before I can answer them. Once they’re answered, I’ll work them into the story as I work… here it comes… “Two Vampires” into a larger story, which has the working title of Adam’s Name.

So, without further ado, let’s watch the Hunter lose control in a Toronto subway:

The nausea passed, and the hunter slowly opened his eyes. The tile breathed more gently now. Control seemed just over the horizon, and he struggled not to force its return. If he did, he feared it might abandon him forever. The hunter did the only thing that was left to him – he prayed. If he pledged himself, cleansed himself, through his devotion, the Almighty would grant him control.

Two pair of leather boots stepped into his field of vision. One pair had four-inch soles. The other was a plain black pair of work boots. The hunter slowly raised his eyes to look the club-goers in the face, and his blood-drinking prey glared down on him.

For a terrible moment, he met their gazes, and felt kinship. For one horrifying instant, he wanted their curse. Tears began to wash down his face.

Megan patted the hunter on his head. She walked out of the subway station, hand in hand with Nicholas.

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TAURUS (April 20-May 20): Many critics consider Maurice Ravel (1875-1937) to be one of the 20th century’s best composers. He is most famous for “Bolero,” an orchestral piece that was originally written as the accompaniment for a ballet. The stimulus that served as Ravel’s major inspiration for “Bolero” was a visit to a cacophonous steel mill. He’s your role model for the coming week, Taurus. I foresee you drawing creative excitement from events that are rife with noise and commotion. May your messy encounters lead you to produce great work, interesting surprises, or both.

Kind of worrisome.

From the journal of :

Putting out the call! I need every picture you’ve ever taken, or found, or stepped on! The catch? I only want it if Dave’s face is in it, no matter how big or small. I’ve already gone through some of your galleries, and gotten a whole bunch, but I want to make sure I’ve gotten them. Give me a link, email the picture (livejournal-user-name at gmail), snail mail it to me (you’ll have to email to get the snail mail address). Don’t care, I just need as many as you can come up with.

Thanks!

I bet you’ll love the final product.

Olive green fisherman’s hat.

Okay, this is wierding me out.

Who left an olive green fisherman’s hat in my office at my house? has already denied that it’s his. It looks a lot like this:

http://www.armysurplusworld.com/product.asp?engine=BizRate&productID=13161&keyword=13161&amount=0.26

Who left their hat at my house?

Problem with motivation.

A writing community that I’m in raised some questions about motivation in Two Vampires, and I need to clear them up. So, I’m writing the questions here. I know the answers to a lot of them, I just need to write them down, and then make them part of the story.

Why does Nicholas follow Megan?

Megan was his friend in life, as well as the one who turned him into a vampire. The way that he describes her physical form in the first journal entry is supposed to portray a twisted love for her. This needs to be more consistent throughout.

Why does Nicholas feel uncomfortable / get petulant about writing in the journal?

Nicholas is used to placing Megan on a pedistal, due to his “love from afar” for her. Her abilities as a seer enhance this. On some level, he knows that she is attempting to teach him to do the same, and his discomfort is meant to be irrational. This is a question that the behavior is supposed to raise, but may not be completely answered when he finally writes about the future.

Why does Megan search for the Mother?

Megan feels driven to find the Mother, both by curiosity about where she came from and by certainty that it will happen due to prophetic vision. To answer a more universal, destiny-ish why, Megan and Nicholas are an impetus to shake the Mother out of simply passing the years, and into something more. That “more” is intended to be unanswered (for now).

Why does the Hunter target Megan and Nicholas specifically, instead of destroying any vampire that he comes upon?

This is hinted at when Megan discovers that the Hunter’s informant knows the location of the Mother. He is trailing them to kill them, yes, but also to find the location of the Mother. She turned the Hunter’s grandfather into a vampire, which comes out in the university library scene. So, revenge.

Why don’t Megan and Nicholas kill the Hunter in the subway station, when they have him at their mercy?

Crap. I don’t know.

Why does the Hunter suddenly want to become a vampire at that moment of stress and weakness, when he’s been trying to kill vampires for the entire story?

Both Megan and Nicholas have the ability to cloud the minds of those around them. Like prophecy, this is something that was inherited from the Mother. They are aware that the Hunter is coming for them at the subway station, and take advantage of the Hunter’s sleep-deprived state. Also, this is supposed to expose the Hunter’s doubt and base desires, through the bit about the Adversary. Some foreshadowing of this doubt is in order.

Why is the Hunter unable to pull the trigger on the Mother?

There are two main forces in play here. First, the Mother’s ability to cloud minds is far more developed than either Megan’s or Nicholas’. She has clouded his mind, in self-defense, to the point that he has difficulty telling his limbs to do anything. Second, the Hunter’s curiosities about what happened with his own grandfather, his battle with his shadow (the Adversary), and his self-doubts are rushing to the fore at this crucial point. He finds himself overwhelmed by everything.

Why does the Mother choose to turn the Hunter into a Vampire, instead of kill him?

Same thing that let him survive the subway. Now I just have to figure out what that is.

How is the Hunter a mistake from centuries past?

He’s not. It should be decades past, as the timeline does not allow for the Hunter’s grandfather to be centuries old.

Also: Megan’s prophecy should move from the end to the beginning. Duhr.

Every politician is a human in disguise. – Matisyahu

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TAURUS (April 20-May 20): “In every work of genius we recognize our own rejected thoughts,” wrote American essayist Ralph Waldo Emerson. “They come back to us with a certain alienated majesty.” The first part of your assignment, Taurus, is to identify other people’s brilliant creations that remind you of good ideas of your own that you’ve failed to develop. The second part of your assignment is to do something–anything!–to correct for your neglect. Get started on your own masterpiece.